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Review:TidalDragon says:
Hello again!

So I liked from the start that there was more balance to this chapter in terms of dialogue vs. other methods. I think it instantly made it an improvement on the previous one and the fact that you also included some more detailed rather than generic descriptions was also a plus.

You did a good job laying the foundation for a bit of mystery (I'm expecting it will be part of the intrigue) with the MIM tattoo and setting up some characters and antagonistic relationships as well.

For me, so of the back-story type stuff, like the Chocolate Frog cards about Harry and Ginny (a nice touch, just not as effective as I thought they could be) and the conversation about blood status and the word "mudblood", was a little dry. If you return to edit, I'd consider tweaking it to make it a bit less "informative" sounding.

Keeping on keeping on now!

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm glad you liked this chapter better than the last one. Like I said before, all of this wonderful CC will be taken into account during the Big Edit.

Thanks for RnRing n

-Karou


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