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Review:lovethepotters says:
Hi! I'm reviewing from the review thread in the Gryffindor CR :)
I hope you don't mind my rambling review but WOW, this is such an amazing e one-shot!

I think you've got James' character spot on, so kudos to you! I couldn't help but laugh when he initially thinks he's in hiding because of a prank - seems like a very Marauder-ish thing to do :)

However, I couldn't help but feel sorry for James when he realises the inevitable - that he's dead and there's nothing he can do to protect Lily or Harry anymore. It was even more moving when he came to realisation gradually, instead of all in one go. I think you wrote that part of the story really well!

The addition of Lily was a lovely touch too! It was nice, yet sadly poignant, to see both of them discuss Harry's future, knowing they won't get to see him grown up. I love how you also had Lily slowly explaining to James what must have happened to the both of them. She obviously connected the dots more quickly than James did, which I think was nice for highlighting their differences!

I'm guessing Lily's quote "part of me feels like thereís something... left. Something that I still need to do" is to do with the Resurrection stone (and if so), I think that it's a clever link to HP7 :)

A little bit of CC: You switched between first and second person in the first paragraph (I know, I'm really nit-picking here sorry), I think it would flow better if you changed it :)

Otherwise this was such a good read, I thoroughly enjoyed myself! Thanks for sharing :D

Author's Response: Hi, there! I don't mind any sort of review, and I really enjoyed seeing so many of your thoughts and reactions to the story.

I tried really hard to keep James age-appropriate as he struggles to figure out what's happened. I didn't want him sounding old and mopey, at least not at the beginning.

But it was inevitable that he's figure it out. I wanted it to seem like his brain was protecting him from the trauma for as long as possible, letting him gradually come to the awful realization.

I always like to imagine James and Lily as being pretty inseparable once they finally got together. Certainly after Harry was born. To me, the way they imagined Harry's future playing out was the saddest part of writing this. It all turned out so differently.

You're correct, Lily has an intuitive feeling that Harry will need them again, as he does when he summons them with the stone.

Hmmnn... I'll take a look at that first paragraph. Writing first-person is hard, although I usually mess up and switch to third person.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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