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Review:Infinityx says:
The mystery really builds up. I love the way you've begun the chapter with that unknown person burning the parchment. Your descriptions were astounding and they made me picture the entire scene in front of me. I love how you've lingered on the scene and taken the time to describe the setting and everything that's happening. The amount of detail you've put in is brilliant and it totally adds to the eerie effect you've got going on here!

That interaction between Sirius and Bella was interesting to say the least. That quip about Bella killing Sirius one day was just ksndfklsmfm. To him it's just her being Bella. If only he knew that it would happen one day. It was a great idea to add that there, and a strong indication to what happens in canon.

I love the way you've described the dinner scene. Once again, the amount of detail you've put in about the setting is fabulous. Also, with the way you've described it, I could almost smell the tension emanating from each of the table occupants. It was brilliant.

I love the way Sirius was portrayed here, as well as all the previous chapters. In this one, his Gryffindor spirit is so clearly seen, with the way he can't stay away from the mystery and him being the first one to take a bite to eat. I think it was a wonderful idea to focus on the family dynamics here, as well as slow the pace down a bit. Great chapter!

~Erin

Huffleclaw - Ravenpuff Eggstravaganza

Author's Response: Hey there again! ;) And thank you so much! It was more difficult to write than I expected, since I wanted to make sure I didn't give anything away as to the identity of the person, which was hard knowing who it is as I kept wanting to include some clues, you know? And write his name, haha. That would definitely have given it away! ;) Thank you so much, though, it's so nice to hear you liked it!

Haha, yeah, I couldn't resist not putting it in! It just seemed to fit in, like something they would say, and something which would happen, so I kept it in. I'm happy you liked it! :)

Gah, thank you so much! It was actually a real struggle for me to write that scene, and I'm so so glad you liked it - it still feels a bit extraneous when I read over it at times, so it helps a lot to hear that!

Thanks! :) I've always tried to portray Sirius as a Gryffindor, since I really think he is absolutely one beyond doubt, but he has some characteristics which also aren't nice and stereotypically seen as Slytherin ones. But yeah, it really had to be him :P I'm glad you liked the family dynamics - it's one of the best things about writing this fic, tbh, getting to explore those relationships and things, so I'm happy you're enjoying them! :)

Thanks so much for the great review - I'm glad you're enjoying it so much! :)

Aph xx


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