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Review:Infinityx says:
Another gripping and completely intriguing chapter! There are so many elements at work here, but somehow they all fit together neatly, I'm sure of it. I am unable to comprehend how though, my mind can only be stretched to certain limits. :P

The relationship between Regulus and Barty is interesting. I'm sure Barty isn't up to anything good and I hope Reg doesn't get caught up in it. I'm a little confused though. The last chapter ended with Crouch being missing, and now he's sitting so comfortably beside Reg, with nothing out of place. Am I missing something here?

I love the whole build up as Sirius prepares to enter Regulus' room. It just shows just how strained their relationship is. But at the same time, we also know how much Sirius cares for his brother, with his concern toward Reg in both the previous as well as this chapter. I think Sirius has a great depth to him and you're exploring that wonderfully.

Lucius knows Barty's secret... I sense trouble brooding. My curiosity is unbounded. I hope there's more to this in the coming chapters!
Walburga seems to be close to telling Barty something about the books but holds herself back. Every small action of the characters seems to hold some kind of importance in this story and I can't help but wonder about the significance of that.

That interaction between Sirius and Narcissa was so sweet. I can't imagine what her feelings must be to know that her sister as well as her husband were killers. I like her character though, she seems really nice. Poor Sirius. The pin has dropped and his suspicions confirmed. It's like he's lost that bliss of not knowing.

I'm looking forward to the next chapters!

~Erin

Huffleclaw - Ravenpuff Eggstravaganza

Author's Response: Hey there, Erin! Thanks so much for stopping by! :) I'm so glad you're enjoying this, particularly enough to come back for more :P

Yeah, Barty is definitely suspicious! I think it's his default setting, lol. As for Regulus - well, we'll see ;) No, you're not missing anything, don't worry! This chapter is a while after the last one, so even though he went missing, and then came back later, they couldn't do anything to him, so they're just suspicious and keeping an eye on him ;) He, of course, is acting oblivious :P

Ah, thank you! I'm so glad you like it, as I love exploring the relationship between Sirius and Regulus so much! They are still brothers, and it does mean something, yeah, it's just... they don't get on. That was kinda how I approached it. I'm so happy you like Sirius, though - I'm really enjoying writing him!

Ooh, yeah, that is quite interesting ;) Not perhaps the most important element of the mystery, but still something of a clue! Yeah, I wanted to include Walburga a bit more in this chapter, so here she is! There is a lot of importance to things in this, but equally things (hopefully) seem important which aren't ;) Sorry about that! :P

I'm so glad you liked that scene - it was one of my favourites to write, but kinda hard because the characters are kinda, well, awkward in it, haha. Yeah, Narcissa is probably the nicest of the characters in this, tbh, and I kinda like portraying her as Bellatrix's antithesis, kinda sweet and innocent and outwardly fragile. Poor Sirius - definitely! :) I think he kinda always suspected, but having it confirmed is so different. I love the way you phrase it, though! :)

Thank you so much for the great review! :)

Aph xx


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