|Review:||Miss MarlaG says:|
so this is me, sharkbait from the forums, unbelievably late with your review. (on my case I went out of the country for a week and just got back!) Out of your many stories I decided to go with this one, and I'm absolutely glad I did!
Grammar and spelling was mighty fine, it makes me envious, in fact, that you don't seem to have any errors, ahahaha. But I think one of the reasons I enjoyed this besides it being a well-written story is the different narrative is gives us. I am a complete sucker for Next Gen stories - and here we have Roxanne as a protagonist, which I've never really seen before or read, in a quiet, observant way but still very present. The reader is as taken with Thackeray as she is, I can assure you - which I'm sure is the reaction you were looking for, and there's just a subtly shy undertone to the way its written that leads you to understand Roxanne far more than her interactions with her cousins do. Even so, I think I love reading her and Thackeray together more than anything.
I also enjoyed a lot his character, how bleeding strange he happens to be, not entirely a Percy Weasley and therefore not really a caricature of the teacher's pet, or the stereotype Ravenclaw. Instead, he cares about his projects and puts heart and soul into them intelligently, and the fact that Roxanne recognises this and gives him the needed respect for it I think is a major plus for the story. I also quite liked how her relationship was treated - outside of the story, mentioned lightly, and how Thackeray's jealousy isn't immediately burst at by shippers because he didn't mean it that way, at least not right now. I do like stories that build up the ship instead of shoving it in my face that these two were meant to be together from day one.
On that note, I really, really liked this, and will look forward to continuing this story to see what on earth Thackeray plans to do now - and drag Roxanne along to. Its been a while since I've read such a smart story.
It was lovely review swapping with you!
Author's Response: Hello! :) Ah, no worries, it was a lovely surprise to receive your review! And I'm really glad you picked this one, it's a little different from my usual style but I really appreciate getting feedback on it.
Excellent! Hehe, it's always a victory when the grammar and spelling is a success. And I'm so pleased you liked this, and found it original. I really enjoyed writing Roxy, and how she is sort of shy, but also very observant. She takes in little details, and she's a very strong person in her own right. I'm glad you found Thackeray intriguing and that their interactions helped you to understand Rox. I love their dynamic, how they're both sensitive, but have different ways of showing it, and how Roxy calms Thackeray down and Thackeray shows Roxy how to get excited and fired up about things.
Thackeray is very strange! :P I actually loved the character so much that I wrote a one-shot featuring Thackeray's childhood, hehe. I also see Thackeray as being very insecure, for multiple reasons, and being very defensive and sometimes aggressively throwing effort into projects to hide that. And I'm glad you liked the slow building of their relationship, and how they established themselves as friends first: I think they could have happily been friends since they get along so well, but happened to fit together as a couple as well. I like them because they're not an obvious couple - they're both a little weird, and not popular, and not necessarily attractive in a mainstream sense of the term, but they get along splendidly, and that's the most important part.
I'm so excited you liked this - thanks so much for the brilliant review! :) I really enjoyed getting your feedback! :D