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Review:TidalDragon says:
Howdy! Dropping by from the review thread in the CR!

From just the brief summary I thought this was going to be an excellent choice going in and your writing absolutely vindicated that in this chapter. You showcased a real talent for description and language in this chapter.

In terms of descriptions I particularly liked the opening sequence where you set the scene, describing the lighting carefully and casting a pure tone over the beginning that ended up fading to darkness much as the chapter did from beginning to middle. I liked what you were going for with the detailed focus on the blood too. I thought you maybe just crossed the line with the number of comparisons there, but regardless the idea was good.

Your word choice throughout was also largely impeccable as I mentioned. You used stronger words, particularly adjectives than I find from many authors and you didn't allow yourself to fall into the trap of commonplace synonyms either. The way you personified various elements in the story, like the snow and the wind was also a nice touch that enhanced your already strong descriptions of the setting.

I also enjoyed the characterization of the lady in the windows (Maggie Bagshot?). While she didn't speak much, you showed us a lot about her through the style of her observations, the things she noticed, and how she commented upon them. I don't know if there will be more of her later in the story, but regardless, this type of characterization via internal thoughts was great and I hope you keep it up as you go forward.

The only things I noticed that you might look at if you decided to edit at all were both minor. When Teddy appears at the window, you end two sentences in a row with the same word (window) and it just sounded a little off as I read it. I think it jumped out at me because your word choice throughout had been so excellent that it made this aberration more noticeable. The other was in your comparison of the drops of blood to rubies. You broke up the initial comparison and the enhancement "like sick, splintered rubies" and it just seemed more natural to me to fuse them. Still, since that's all that really caught my attention you should know that I was really impressed.

This was a great start to what I think could definitely be a great story! I'm adding it to my reading list immediately!

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