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Review:Twinkleflower says:
So I have a confession to make. After reading the first chapter I felt compelled to keep reading and I'm glad I did. I read the next four chapters back to back so forgive me if this review is a bit general about your story rather than this specific chapter.

I feel that your story has started to hit its stride and the writing seem to flow more smoothly. My favourite parts so far have been both appearances of Regulus in your story. He is not how I imagined him at all, but I really like your portrayal of him. Also, your delivery of the dialogue between him and Ellie just feels so... 'real' is the only word I can think to describe it, I hope that made sense.

I do have one criticism, but only one I promise. In one of the earlier chapters it said somewhere that Ellie was taking ten NEWTs I think? This seems like an awful lot to me, as I think about five is normal. So she might take an extra subject or two if she is really brainy, just a suggestion.

I like how you have started to further develop Ellie's relationships between her peers, especially the scene with Scorpious and their mutual hate of plants. I think it was a nice way to end the chapter by having Scorpious reveal his feelings about Rose. I especially liked the final line as it made me chuckle so much. I really like where this story is going and I hope you continue writing.

Author's Response: Aww! I'm so flattered! It's lovely of you to leave a review :)

Yeah, it became easier to write the story as the chapters went on. I think I just became more comfortable with my characters, so that I could worry less about them and more about the plot. Regulus is a favourite of mine to write. It's a lot of fun to write him this way! I wanted to do something a little different with him. I'm glad you enjoy their banter!

Ellie is an over-achiever. That being said, I have struggled with how to portray her academic load, and what it says about her as a character. I've made a note about it so that I'll be sure to address it in a later chapter (hopefully the next).

I'm happy you liked that inclusion of ScoRose! I loved writing it. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)


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