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Review:HEG says:
Hello again! Another chapter I see...

Oh my goodness, Daegan is the Basalisk (when you said 'snake' did you mean Basalisk?) And Lord Alpha! I wasn't expecting to see Him in this chapter. Well, it was certainly packed. So many things were happening all at once! The only thing I would say is that you were flitting between scenes a bit too much. Of course, that's just my opinion so you don't have to listen, but it was quite hard to keep up and some of the scenes were rather short. Maybe you could add to them or just have less scenes. Saying that, it was actually quite good to know what say Scorpius was doing while also knowing what Harry or Albus were doing. Still loving the telepathy! I simply can't get over what a good idea that is. Another person who I'm curious about is Omega. If I am getting this right, is he Lord Alpha's son? I can't wait for the next chapter! Very well written (as usual) well done!


Author's Response: Hello!

Nah, he's just a rather large snake. ("Hissy hiss-" Go away Daegan, get back in the story.)

Ahem. Thank you for the feedback! I think what I'll do is combine some of the scenes, which will make them longer AND there'll be less of them. Yes, Omega is Alpha's son. They are ALPHA and OMEGA Gaunt, get it?

Hehe...Thanks for the awesome review! One more chapter and then the story has caught up with me. I'm still in the middle of writing chapter 15, it's getting annoying now. Ah well, I'll get through it.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

-Karou :)

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