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Review:nott theodore says:
ADI! So officially I'm here with the review I owe you from ages ago for the February Review Competition, but I'm also here because I haven't read your stories for ages and I really want to!

I loved your characterisation of Harry in this. He'd matured quite a bit from the character that we see in the books, and I think you took what we see in the epilogue and expanded on that really well. He felt like a very believable character, with a few contradictory elements which fit in well. My favourite aspect was the way he came across as such a caring father in this. Hogwarts for him, in spite of what happened later on, will always be the first place that he ever really felt he could call home, so I can understand that he would want his son to be excited about going and the time that he gets to spend there. Seeing that vulnerability and worry in his young son must be quite worrying for him, and his actions because of that feel like they make sense.

I felt really sorry for Al as well. I imagine that his brother probably hasn't helped him to feel more comfortable about going to Hogwarts, and while he is excited about the prospect of starting school it becomes a bigger fear, but still one that he tries not to show. I loved your characterisation of Rose, as well! I know you've written her quite a bit and I think the mention of her was really believable. I can definitely imagine little Rose - Hermione's daughter - with a training wand and a copy of Hogwarts: A History :P

The second part really intrigued me. I wasn't sure what to expect of the story when I saw the title and then the characters and summary, but I think the way you're going to segue into this tale is very effective. The description of Spinner's End was great, and actually reminded me of some places I've seen here.

The idea of the diary as a present and the photograph seemed simple but I think they were really effective and poignant here. It was a great idea to show us the two of them as friends before anything came in the way of their friendship, when it was simple and pure. I think seeing Snape like that makes it easier to prepare the reader for whatever will come next, especially if (like me) they're not Snape's biggest fan.

I'm really interested to see where you go from here with this story, so hopefully I can get back soon! This was a great start, Adi!

Sian :)

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