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Review:Betsy says:
I really like your story so far. I've always loved Marauder fic, but sometimes feel annoyed by the common cliches in them. Your story is very original and I think the characters stay true to canon. Even when you switch back and forth between POVs, it is easy to distinguish between the different voices. I loved the political detail that you added to this chapter because it is such an important part of the war that is raging around them. I appreciate that you didn't turn Peter's character into a blatantly ignorant drone or ignore his existence completely, as I have seen in so many stories. You also do a really good job of sticking to the time period and setting of the era. I realize this review is super long now, but I love it when I find a well-written, fun, smart story. I can't wait to continue reading, particularly about Sirius and Gemma. (Sirius/OC stories are kind of a guilty obsession for me)

Author's Response: Hello Betsy!! I don't mind that you left a long review - in fact, I always freak out (in a good way) every time anyone gives me a lot of feedback.

First of all, I feel you on the Marauders cliches, so I tried to stay away from them as much as possible. In 34 chapters, I don't think I've ever done the "You're serious?" "No, I'm Sirius" joke ... maybe I'll throw it in the last chapter just for giggles XD But anyways! Yeah, I've tried really hard to make this story different in that respect.

As for the realistic/canon part ... well most of these characters are based on me/people I know. So that's probably why it feels so realistic! But I've also added a lot of canon details, simply because it distances the story away from my real life. It's also supposed to be a "coming of age" tale, so I also wanted to connect it back to the canon Marauders after they're done with Hogwarts. I was also a Political Science major in college, so I just had to put the whole fascism part in there ;)

Which brings me to Peter. Sirius and Gemma sparked this story and it was originally supposed to be all about them ... but then I realized that all the other Marauders had to have subplots and it would be difficult to explain everything going on if everyone didn't have their own chapters. So that's why I decided to give Peter a brain - his chapters would be pretty boring otherwise!!

Thanks for reading - but I will say that you're early on in the story. Things are about to heat up for you XD

Carly


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