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Review:CambAngst says:
Tanya! How have I never seen this before? You have a story set in my favorite era (post-war) to read. You certainly have a compelling plot idea and a lead character who seems to be living the horror of Fred's death from the periphery. Again, HOW have I never seen this?

You set a very stark tone from the outset. Six months after the end of the war -- six months after Fred's death -- she's completely alone. It seems pretty obvious that she's done something terrible. Or at least she thinks it was terrible. But what?

The section that flashes back to the funeral was also beautifully done. This is my favorite type of first chapter to read. You don't bother introducing anyone or anything. All of that name, rank and serial number crap can come later. Instead, you pulled me right into the gut-wrenching emotions of the story. It didn't matter so much whose funeral she was attending or who she was, because I could relate to exactly what she was feeling. I've read a dozen or more different authors' versions of Fred's funeral over the years. I didn't need you to tell me who was there or how anyone was dressed or how devastated George looked or what anyone had to say. All of those emotions are inside. You just set the scene from the perspective of someone who feels like an unworthy outsider and that was the context I needed right there. Brilliant!

I'm really looking forward to reading more! Great job!

Author's Response: Dan! Ah, I'm so sorry for the delay in responding to this wonderful review! It's great that I've got a story in one of your favorite era's, though, with some serious Fred and George action going on! hehehe I'm very happy you discovered it and are enjoying it so far! :-D

Great to hear that this chapter evokes that ominous feeling! It's definitely vague and I had to use a lot of restraint here so as to not give much away, and I'm glad that it managed to intrigue you! Always an excellent thing to hear! Thanks!

Aww, thank you, Dan; I'm really thrilled you feel that way! I know that when I read a story - a multi-chaptered one, especially - that begins with just an onslaught of background information, I tend to feel immediately put-off by it, and so I actively try to stay away from that myself, preferring to slowly hand out bits of information as they become relevant to the storyline. I'm glad you're on board with that style as well! ^.^ Gah, that's so, so wonderful to hear that jumping straight into the emotions, sans the background info, really helped to pull you in! This review really makes me smile and validates my decisions! Yay! ^.^

Thank you, thank you, thank you, Dan! This is such a lovely review and I'm so glad you stopped by my novel on your journey to reaching 1,000 reviews! Congrats again, by the way - so fantastic! *hugs*

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