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Review:AlexFan says:
I knew it! I knew that something was going to go wrong! Everything was just going too smoothly for it to last. If it's too good to be true then it probably is.

I will admit though, that up until the point that Albus was caught making out with Jenna, the chapter was pretty damn hilarious. I especially loved Bri's explanation of exactly how hot the shower water was. Dom is just the absolute best at giving insults, that comment about looking like a brick that a bird pooped on was wonderful.

One thing that I would suggest is maybe looking the chapter over and fixing the grammatical errors throughout it but other than that I enjoyed it.

But to move on to Albus, why would he do this! He's made it very clear that he likes Bri, very clear. Even his cousins and siblings have pointed out that he's smitten with Bri. Does he not think that he has a chance with Bri? Is that it? Does he think that she's never going to like him and so he might as well just move on with his life because Bri sure as heck has?

Personally, I think this entire mess could be solved if either Bri or Albus burst out singing Take a Chance On Me to the other.

Author's Response: First of all, so excited for this long review! And yes, you're right! Not everything is smooth sailings.

Thank you! That shower part was one of my favorite parts, to be honest! Dom's character is a lot of fun to play with.

I will try my best to do that!

I wish I could answer all these questions but I don't want to spoil anything! As everyone will find out soon that Albus is just a little bit more complicated then his little crush with Brielle.

HAHA I think that would be a wonderful way to solve their problems!


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