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Review:TidalDragon says:
Alrighty! So this chapter was relatively straightforward. It thankfully finally displayed one of the Weasleys making a faux pas. It's nice that they've been so accommodating and wonderful (and it's helped you that you've condensed the time spent with them into a limited number of days), but I think they are reaching perhaps being a little TOO perfect.

As far as your ultimate question, it's difficult to answer fully without knowing where the drop off is happening. I think from a stylistic and skill perspective, you are a talented writer. You do really well with a complex character like Sadie - conveying her thoughts, feelings, and flashbacks - and though it has become a spot less consistent since the earliest chapters, you definitely have a knack for description too. I do think as you partially acknowledge in your A/N, you may be losing readers because of how long the story is taking to develop. I definitely appreciate why you're taking the approach you are and I think it's valuable and important, but I have found in my own limited experience so far that only so many readers like long-developing stories (at least while they are WIPs). Certainly there are many on the forums who admit to only reading anything longer than a short story once it reaches completed status. Again, I don't know the numbers, but I'd be excited by how many reviews you have received (I imagine you have quite a few reads too given the number of reviews), especially if they're so positive. If you haven't already, you could try a summary tweak, promoting it in the forums (if that's your bag - personally, I didn't notice a bump the lone time I posted a chapter update), or whatnot, but I'd keep on keeping on.

I will level with you and say that as a reader the plot is not my cup of tea. Despite the intrigue and the very well-written OC, I just don't tend to read AU fics in the Hogwarts Era that don't drastically alter at least two canon characters or major canon relationships or find a way to remove them from Hogwarts entirely. But that's just me, and I feel like I'm kind of a minority in a number of my fic preferences.

Objectively though, I can say for sure is that you have a VERY good thing going from a writing perspective. DON'T GET DISCOURAGED!

Author's Response: Look, I'm only a year and a month late. How is that for pathetic?

But, I couldn't let this last review of that wonderful bunch you gave me last year go unanswered. Thank you so much for taking the time to read through my story, address my concerns, and give such positive feedback. I really appreciated it then, and I still appreciate it now. I think you are a brilliant author and so I very much value your opinion on things.

I have worried about the drawn out length of developing the characters before getting to the action. It doesn't help that I write at slower than a snail's pace. Hopefully, I can fix that in the next few chapters and get this story moving. I will also be careful to not make the characters too perfect. When you are writing about characters you like a lot, it's hard to remember to give them flaws as well - and we all know how much I love the Weasleys. LOL.

A summary tweak is something I've been pondering for almost a year now. I just haven't done it because I honestly haven't taken the time to sit down and think of a better one yet, but I really should get on with that. I think you are right that it would help direct readers to the story who are interested in this type of thing.

Thank you again! You are amazing. :)

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