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Review:TidalDragon says:
Wow!

So the flashback Sadie had of her family being murdered was just - intense. Chilling, but VERY well done. It definitely enhances Sadie's withdrawn, constantly-worried characterization and it also provokes some huge questions that I am left wanting answers to. Who is this familiar person who killed her family, seemingly in an act of betrayal? Why/how did Sadie live? On a different note, it seemed like the Death Eater (or whoever was present with him) used a gun. Why would a group that abhors Muggles and anything to do with them use a Muggle weapon to kill? Seems a little odd, but perhaps you'll explain it.

I will say that a sizeable portion of this chapter though seemed to be devoted to getting us from the tents to the eventual point you wanted to end on. I'm not sure if this was planned or if you just viewed it as a necessity, but it was noticeable this time. Every story (especially a novel length one) will have its moments like that, but just take care it doesn't develop into something frequent.

Author's Response: I was really worried about that flashback - how to make it as impactful as it needed to be, but not go beyond the limits of the TOS. It's a line I seem to be walking in a few places in this story.

As for the questions it provoked - that's good! I was hoping people would catch some details I threw in there, that might seem inconsistent, and start asking questions about them! You are one of a very few people to catch the use of a Muggle weapon. And while I'm not going to answer this question for you right now, just know it wasn't a typo or mistake. You have good eyes.

Taking too much time setting up scenes - got it. I will try to keep an eye on it. I was hoping to give a picture of what could have happened that night from someone other than the trios' POV, but I didn't want it to be long and tedious, so I will have to make sure and keep a hold on that as I try to tell this mostly canon story without rehashing what has already been done.

Thanks again!


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