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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
Erica! Sorry it's taken me a little longer than anticipated to get around to this review!

This was another GREAT chapter. I love that you've written it in first person, it sets apart the two points of view we've seen so far from your main characters. I liked that you wrote Albus and Taryn meeting from his point of view, it fit really well with the first chapter.

The interaction between Albus and Harry was just adorable, Harry talking about Dean's death was really in character, it's clear that he's used to death in his life but that it still affects him after all these years.

I also really liked the character you've created so far for Albus, he seems very professional and dedicated to his job, as well as a good leader. The little details like him worrying about his co-workers were nice touches :)

I'm really intrigued to find out who Taryn was kissing, and why she was doing it when she's supposed to be working!

If you're struggling to find a beta I would be more than happy to do it for you, I'm so in love with this story already :D

Dee x

Author's Response: Dee! Another wonderful review! I really can't thank you enough for all of your support for this story! I made sure that when I wrote the meeting that I checked how it was written in Taryn's pov to make sure that they would mash up well. I'm really glad that you like my Albus as well! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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