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Review:kenpo says:
Hey, thanks so much for entering my challenge! I think I said that I'd review the first two or three chapters, but since your chapters are short (are they all 500 words without Author's Note?), I'll probably do all five. They'll just be shorter, lame reviews :p.

Random things:
I don't know if she's accepting pre-written stories, but if she is, you should enter this in patronus_charm's 2nd person POV challenge. Just sayin'.

In you're Author's Note, you say that each movement is named for a suite in France. "Suite" refers to the type/structure of the music. I think you mean to say providence.

Okay, onto the story.

I think you captured the mood of the movement really well, which is a little surprising because the song sounds distinctly French, while the story obviously takes place elsewhere.

I loved the line "flaming locks of rust". You wrote this very well. I love reading your writing.

Alright. Onto chapter two! (hopefully you don't get annoyed by five short reviews rather than two longer ones...)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your challenge and your review(s)!!

Lame reviews are better than no reviews! Also, this review wasn't lame. :P

Yeah, I think I looked at her challenge... Unfortunately, pre-written stories aren't accepted. However, it was a nice exercise for me, because it was my first try at second person POV!

Hahahahaha, FAIL. I truly didn't mean to do that! I will fix it sometime this week. :)

Thank you! Yeah, I was kind of in cognitive dissonance with the song and the content because of the setting disparity, but I just went with it. This movement sounds SO Gryffindorian to me, so I wanted him to head the whole story up. :)

Augggh, thank you! It's compliments like yours that make a "blah" day much better. :D

By all means, read on!

~UnluckyStar57


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