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Review:TidalDragon says:
Howdy! Dropping by in response to your review request!

So to begin with, you have an interesting concept based on the summary and you scratch the surface of that here. For me, I would like a bit more of Maeve's feelings with it though, and not just as expressed by her. For this concept to work, I need to feel what she is feeling. Here, I think it comes down to word choice and description. Look at places that you want to have a particular tone or emotion associated with them and try to carefully select words that are strong and evocative. When you are describing things, go into more detail the more crucial the moment is. Allow positioning of characters in relation to others to be described to draw attention to them or things about them. For Maeve, a good idea would be to subtly set her apart from her family at important points so that we feel her disconnect along with her. Give us more examples of that disconnect too.

Formatting is also an issue here. I'm not sure if it's what you're using to post or what, but the excessive spacing between paragraphs is distracting.

The best things you have done so far though are to set up some intrigue right from the off with Dorothea and her ominous words and to "show don't tell" about Maeve being drawn to the weather. While you do technically tells us that, you also provide multiple good examples of situations where it has happened, which helps us understand it better.

See you next chapter!

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for your review, it's very helpful. I'm really glad you pointed out the need for more of a disconnect because I didn't even notice it before. About the formatting, I'm so sorry! When I submitted it to the queue it automatically did that and I was trying to figure out how to change it, but I think the might be a glitch somehow. I'm glad you liked the Doreatha interaction and the description :)

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