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Review:MargaretLane says:
I'm guessing Bathilda is dead here and the "heaven" is meant literally. I'm not 100% sure. At first I assumed it was, but then the stranger coming in and ruining her day started me wondering if that'd happen in heaven and then when she wondered if she was in hell, I thought it probably was literal again. *laughs*

I love your description of it and your style of writing also. There's something almost old-fashioned in the style of writing that allows me "hear" Bathilda. You appear to be very good at characterising people through the narrative itself. Even though this isn't first person, the slightly formal language fits with the era she comes from.

Hmm, the part where you describe how she imagines the children and their laughter being that "of hungry monsters" is rather ominous. I'm guessing the implications of that will become clear later.

I wonder who the visitor is and why she is accusing Bathilda of not telling the truth. Something to do with Grindlewald, perhaps. Or Dumbledore.

*grins at the idea of Bathilda being "scandalously unmarried"* I was just yesterday commenting how many of our leaders of 1916 were unmarried in their 30s, but that is Ireland and there are rather especial reasons why marriage was delayed here (1/8 of the country starving to death in the space of five year tends to have long-term effects).

I do like the idea of an unmarried historian. *laughs*

And ooh, the Imperius Curse on Oliver Cromwell. Cromwell is probably the most hated character in Irish history, so that amuses me. There are some theories now that say he wasn't as bad as he was painted, but on the whole, NOT a popular character here.

Ah, your note at the end confirms that this is literally heaven.

A part of me sort of suspects the visitor in question is Muriel, but I don't think she'd be dead yet, so I'm not sure. *ponders*

Author's Response: Hello! :)

That's a good guess! I wanted to give the story a unique spin and writing it from an afterlife perspective was very interesting and challenging for me. I imagined her being in a sort of confusing limbo, though explaining the full extent of heaven and hell is a little much for a short story like this. :)

Thank you! I'm very pleased you liked the style of writing, and that it fit the era and the character. That really means a lot to hear as it's one way in which I try to get into the characters' heads.

The children are eventually sort of explained - they're quite creepy to write, but do have a certain significance.

Ah, very good point about Ireland! That's quite interesting. I imagined that for a woman like Bathilda, especially since she lives alone, it would be a little improper and she might be criticized by society.

Haha! That is very true, I personally think he was such an extreme historical character. It would be interesting to learn more about how history has portrayed him in comparison to how he actually was, but yes, not good for Ireland. I liked imagining what effects and consequences it might have if he were controlled by wizards as well.

Hmm, interesting guess! :)

Thanks so much for the review! :)


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