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Review:HEG says:
Hiya!

Another chapter I see. Well, I really like this chapter. I am beginning to see the relationship between Rose and Hugo. You can tell that Rose gets easily irritated by Him and Hugo likes to annoy. Aww, I feel sorry for Hugo, he can't go to Hogwarts for another year because he is two weeks too young. I'd hate that if my cousin was only one or two months older than me but I had to be in the year below them. Especially if you were good friends and you got along with them well (it seems like Hugo and Lily do) then it wouldn't be nice.

I like the way Rose 's personality is so mature, sensible and clever but all Hugo wants to do is have fun. I can really imagine that happening. I reckon the house Hugo will be sorted into (I know it's quite early) will be Gryffindor. I can't imagine him an any of the other houses. Though maybe as Rose said, he could be a Hufflepuff but I'm further towards Gryffindor.

*laughs* the conversation about Muggles playing on the Wii. If I was a witch or a wizard I would probably think that the Wii was on of the weirdest most strange inventions in the world. You did a good job on that scene. I wonder how they could make a Qudditch one on the Wii. That would be interesting - you might just be hovering in your living room staring at a Snitch on the tv. *laughs.*

Hehe, Mr. Weasley is attempting at a Muggle barbecue. It'll be interesting to see how that turns out! Maybe he'll ask Harry or something for helps. After all, Harry lived with Muggles for eleven years - I'm sure he'll know how to do a barbecue.

I like the bit where you've said Percy pursed his lips. You've DEFINETLY got him into character there. I know he would disapprove of any kind of sport job or a job in Weasley's Wizard Wheezes which I think he detestes. Percy was very studious and show offy. He sort of got a little better at the end but his personality is still there.

*grins* Hermione is still like she used to be - stopping Ron from breaking the rules. I can't believe Ron still wants to fly that car which he got in so much trouble for in second year. He really is the opposite to Hermione.

The barbecue seemed to go well. I was expecting disaster. Though I bet Derek gave him a LOT of help!

The only thing I would say is to put a little more detail into the bit on plat form 9 and 3/4 I think it lacked in that. Maybe you could have all of them chatting about a new professor or a new subject or arguing about their Quidditch team. But they are just suggestions :).

This was very well written and you've done a good job. I can't wait fir the sorting. I do love a sorting chapter. I wonder what house Lily will be in. Also, I wonder what A.W.L is. I actually have no idea!

HEG :)

Author's Response: Yeah, that is tough on Hugo. Over here, there isn't a date at which you have to start school a particular year: you just have to start before you turn six and can't start before four. In practice most people start about four and a half, but Lily and Hugo could definitely start when she was five and he was a couple of weeks before his fifth birthday.

I actually don't know what house Hugo will be in. He's the only one I'm undecided on, except Roxanne and she won't start Hogwarts in the series anyway, so that isn't something I'll have to decide.

Everybody seems to have expected disaster from Mr. Weasley barbecuing. I wonder why!

I'll take a look at that bit on the platform again. There is a new Potions master, so I suppose I could include a mention of him.

What the A.W.L. is is sort of implied in chapter 2. There will be more about it later, though.


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