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Review:marauderfan says:
Hufflepuff Review Tag swap! :p

Hm, I don't think I've read a story about Louis Weasley before. So yay!

wow, that dream is intense! I wonder why Louis is getting these strange dreams. Is he a seer but doesn't know it? Was he the unknowing victim of a bad-dream-hex? (Ok, probably not) Well, it's certainly eerie. I'll be interested to see what is causing that and what it means!

I love the sibling relationship you've portrayed between Vic and Louis. The way she teases him a lot but still really looks out for him - she's a good older sister. Also a believable one, because what older sibling doesn't snoop around through the younger sibling's stuff? hehe.

Already you have done really well with the characters, the only thing I'd suggest would be to have a look over the verb tense again as it switches back and forth a bit. Anyway, this is a great start on this fic, I enjoyed this chapter! Nice job :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love working with these characters. I've started to look more closely at watching my verb tenses when writing the later chapters, so hopefully I am catching it a lot better. I just need to stop being lazy and go back through to edit this chapter again :P
Thanks again though!
- kyle (Hufflepuff_Blits)

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