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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
I'm here for the Blackout (number 17/20)!

Plot/plot arch: Al's reluctance to go to Hogwarts because he feared being sorted into Slytherin was sweet. It was also fell nicely along the lines of cannon, because we know this was one of his concerns before boarding the train. Harry's longing for his son to be excited about Hogwarts -- Harry's true home as a child -- is completely understandable. Though it caused some serious Snape feels, I'm glad you included the section where Harry travels to Severus' old home in search of some more information about him. Harry was only able to learn a bit about Severus in DH, and it makes sense that what he did learn would spur some curiosity. I'm now super interested to learn what is in Severus Snape's diary.

Characterization: Harry-- I think you did a fantastic job! His role as a father is endearing, and his curiosity suits cannon.

Detail: I love the detail you've added to this. The little details make the story flow nicely, slowing it down appropriately, and they created some nice imagery.

Emotion: This has definitely evokes some strong curiosity and intrigue, so fantastic job!

Notes/other: This was well-written and interesting; I can't wait to read the next chapter!

-Rumpel

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