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Review:RoseOwl says:
You have written another fantastic story. Be proud.

I was seriously shocked by Lily's death. I fully expected that James would save her in the nick-of-time as has happened in every fix that I have read. Wonderful twist there.

I liked that Snape was the murderer and I liked his motive ("if he couldn't have her than no one should") but I wish that you would have elaborated more about what actually drove him off the deep end (am I using the metaphor right?) because it seemed a bit sudden. Why did he choose that specific day or week or whatever to kill her. What changed, what suddenly gave him the idea?

About the ending, and here I blabber more than usual so be free to toss it out, when Snape is being taken away to trial or to Azkaban or wherever, I would have totally have him be freed by Voldemort and let him grow to be one of his most loyal, psychopathic right hand, crazier than Bella herself.

Overall, this story was pure joy. Sorry for rambling on though, and for my English too, it isn't my first language. :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment! I actually sort of like writing the worst possible scenario, if that makes sense -- I prefer realism over the happily-ever-after ending. I do think more elaboration could have been included, but at the same time, I wanted it to be a mystery story, not a story about Snape's mental illness. That's a good idea for a one-shot or two, though!

Your English is very good! I'm impressed. :) Thank you for taking the time to review!

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