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Review:randomwriter says:
Hi again :)
Another great chapter!

I think I that I fall more in love with Jason, with each passing chapter. In this one, he was just so awkward and shy and cute. I found it really funny how he asked her to stay, claiming that Winston would want it :p

Both of them seem more mellow after the kiss. Initially, there was witty banter, coupled with sarcastic remarks and some quick-thinking. I can see that the kiss is already altering their relationship. It will be interesting to see where it goes from here.

The side plot about Violet and the creep is also interesting. I found it slightly funny that she may have a stalker :p She seems like a strong no-nonsense kind of person. So her+Roxanne together against The Creep will be really funny :p I'd love to see how they'd handle him.

I did spot a couple of mistakes though. Nothing major. Just a few missed apostrophes and a couple of words that haven't been capitalised. Nothing a quick read through won't fix.

Your story is light hearted and entertaining. It's keeping me thoroughly entertained :)

Author's Response: Awww thank you! :D *squishes*

You can love him, I know that I do. :D And Roxanne does although she's totally denying it at the moment. I really love writing him as shy and awkward around Roxanne, when he was so confident in the first few chapters, but now she's actually there he's turned into this Jason. :P

That kiss has changed a few things between them, they may go back to the witty banter, how can I not when that's Jason. :P

I wanted to show that there's a downside to being a Quidditch player, and he's going to make more of an appearance in this. So he'll be around again.

oh no! Thank you so much for pointing those out, I shall go back and edit those. :D

Thank you so so so much for your fabulous reviews! You make my day!! :D

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