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Review:adluvshp says:
Blackout Battle 2/20

Hello again! So, I think this chapter was a superb follow-up to the previous one. The first chapter set the scene but here we have jumped into the investigation which is all the more interesting. I also liked how you've chosen Harry, Ron, Neville, on the head auror's team.

The brief insight we got into the three guys was nice and simple, and believably written. The friendship shared between Ron and Harry was the same and it made me smile. I also liked your portrayal of Neville and the brief mention of Luna & Rolf - and Neville's inclination towards Hannah. The way Ron and Neville were comfortable with each other, placing "bets" and all, was also a good touch.

I never pondered over how investigations and the like would be done in the wizarding world but you certainly captured it brilliantly! The tracing charm etc. and all things that Harry did were realistic and very interesting to read. I liked how they were trying to piece together what had happened.

All in all, another great chapter and I am excited to know more. Do keep writing. This story is certainly going into my favourites and I'm glad I got a chance to read it =)

Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: I'm very glad you're enjoying it!

Aside from writing a story in a genre I've never attempted before, my biggest worry with this story is the canon characters. Even though they're some distance from the Battle of Hogwarts and where they appear in the epilogue, which gives me a little wiggle room, they mean so much to me (and everyone else here) that I'm just sweating not getting them right. I know the moment will come when I will inevitably read the dreaded "I did think x was OOC for blank", but for now it is incredibly gratifying to hear that you thought their first appearances were in character!

I'm also really glad you liked the investigation! I tried to make it both alike and different to "real" criminal investigation and the tracing charm was my first crack at a fan-made spell, so I'm glad you found it believable.

Thanks for sticking with it and reviewing! The next chapter is already in the queue...


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