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Review:Infinityx says:
Oh wow, Amanda. This was just so completely, utterly beautiful and touching.

Here for the BvB battle.

I've always admired your writing, and I found this absolutely powerful and perfectly written. Your descriptions were brilliant and the amount of detail you put into this made me hang on to every single word until it was over. It was amazing.

There was just one thing that confused me a bit in the middle. When Lockart heard the healers talking about the woman who had passed, he was immediately certain that it was his fan. But there's no mention of the healers saying her name or anything more about her identity. It could have been any woman in that case. When her letters stopped coming, Lockart's suspicions would be confirmed, but until then they would just be suspicions, right? So wouldn't it be better to show him fretting and worrying, and then his reactions to the confirmation of her death? That part kind of disrupted the flow, but maybe it's just me.

Other than that, I absolutely love this story. You've characterized Lockart wonderfully. I especially love how he was so engrossed in the stories within his own books in the beginning, without knowing that he was the one who wrote them.

I usually quote parts which I find most brilliantly written but if I do that here, I'd end up quoting the entire story back to you. I can't find even a single redundant word here. The writing is perfect.

~Erin

Author's Response: Hi Erin!

Thanks so much for your kind words. It's great to hear you found the story captivating!

The middle part you mention was meant to be a bit hazy. I definitely used some artistic license when describing how Lockhart just "knew" that it was his fan who passed away. Maybe he found out behind the scenes who she was, or maybe he just felt in his heart that the event was meaningful, but I purposefully did not go into the details in order to stick to the loose flow of the story. I hope that makes sense!

It is good to hear that you liked the details I emphasized, like him reading his own books and becoming his own "fan."

Thanks again for stopping by!

-Amanda


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