Goodness gracious, what are you doing to me? I'm scared, I'm excited, I'm slightly happy. Okay, I'll start at the beginning.
Wow, I love this side of Draco. He's calm, cool, collected, but he knows how to interrogate someone. He can truly read someone through body language, not just through legilimens, which I think is a really good characteristic you've given him. It adds to the investigator personality.
The fact that he figured out that Astoria's family was a weak spot was amazing, and I wish Astoria could have figured out what he was doing, but I guess you win some, you lose some.
Astoria should have learned legilimens from her mother, definitely, but also how to keep a level head. She threw herself under the bus by reacting too strongly to questions about her family, although I did quite like how the only thing that actually got her to talk (sort of) was Draco going through her mind (not that I liked that, but it shows how resilient Astoria is).
The fact that Astoria realizes that her mother was too vain to believe that legilimens would ever save her because she believed she was too good to be caught was really cool and added so much to the story. We've never actually met her mother in the story (except for those flashback type moments), but I feel that if Draco were interrogating Mrs. Greengrass, she would be quite haughty and look down on him, thinking she was better than him.
Which is a good thing, since I can imagine your characters in different settings! Kudos to you!
Anyways, this was a great chapter and I hope you update soon because this is a truly magnificent story. Great job!
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Author's Response: Allo!
Sigh. I, too, wish that Astoria could have caught on quicker. But she can't be entirely invulnerable, and he hit her in a place that's very hard to defend.
Draco was a bit brilliant there, wasn't he? If anything, they're well-matched opponents. Like you say, they both win some and lose some.
And I'd say Astoria keeps a level head in most cases. She *should* have known better than to react, but I think it's useful to remember that, daughter of a spy or not, she's still only 16. Not that 16 year-olds can't be brilliant and keep a cool head, because she is and she does, but there's still a part of her that's vulnerable and does have less life experience. Her family is her main weakness, which is an important thing to know.
Haha, good call on Lavinia! She'd definitely be haughty if she was in Astoria's place. She'd also probably be offended that they sent some young pup with the ink still drying on his Mark to interrogate her. Do they know who she is? No? Well that's because she's a SPY and a d*** good one, at that! So why doesn't he just enjoy a few biscuits and leave the intrigue and interrogations to the professionals, hmm?
...Now I can't stop imagining that scene, Lo ;)
I'm really glad that you enjoyed the chapter. New one should be up soon. Thanks for your thoughts--they were really fun to read!