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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello again! :)

I love how this started from Fred's perspective. It's great getting insight into the Weasleys and what they think of the situation and of Sadie, like with Bill in the last chapter. I also really liked how the twins took care of Ginny like good big brothers, and how angry Fred was at how the Muggles were being abused. That scene is so poignant, and I really appreciated his disgust and empathy.

Ron, Harry, and Hermione were drawn to danger like moths to the flame. Haha, this is actually so true that it's almost funny! Ever since the troll in the dungeon they always do seem to be wherever danger is. I also like how you've made it so clear that the three of them are always together, a little group within the group, which is such an intrinsic part of the books and their characters.

I felt like I could really feel and see the whole scene, you wrote it so well. Your writing has a really lovely visual quality to it that made the whole chapter feel very real.

In his world, surprises were for fun and laughter; he lived for them. This is a really unique comparison between Sadie and Fred. That being said, I can really see how they might eventually grow to fall in love. He's so caring towards her, and he seems to be able to help her relax and be at ease, even to laugh, which she really does need. Also, I love how empathetic Fred is here. He truly puts himself in other people's shoes and tries to alleviate their pain.

Oh my, the flashback scene... that's some heartbreaking stuff, farmgirl. I felt really tense and horrified when reading it, how Sadie had to stand there and watch as one by one her family were slaughtered... it's truly horrifying, and says a lot in showing why she's so frightened and easily triggered now. :( Poor girl.

This was a wonderful chapter, as usual! :)

Blackout Round 3 - 11/20

Author's Response: I have always said I love my Weasley twins equally. But, that said, I do find myself writing from Fred's POV more often than George. Not sure what that says about me, but your comments here just made me realize that. Glad you enjoyed it though. I love any chance I can get to show that there is more to the twins than just being jokers. They have a very serious and loyal streak as well.

The Trio just HAVE to be in the middle of everything, don't they? I can't really complain, because without that ability to be drawn to danger the books would have been very boring. But, just once you have to wonder if they ever stopped and went, "this could be dangerous, perhaps we should just stay here for now." Probably not...

And now I'm blushing from your comment about my writing. Thank you, very much.

So you can see how a Sadie/Fred thing might spring up? YES! This is a good thing. I didn't want it to be totally out of character when it eventually gets there.

The flashback scene was hard. Because there is so much of this story written, much of it not posted yet that stretches both after this point of the story and before it, I felt very much like I was killing off friends in that scene. And then I felt like a monster to make Sadie watch it. But it is so pivotal to the plot I had to find a way to include it. Thanks for slogging through it even though it was unpleasant.

Thanks again! One more response coming later tonight.


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