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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :)

This was a great continuation, and it really has that murder investigation feeling, if you know what I mean. I liked getting some insight into the boys and what they're up to, especially with Neville. I like how he was hanging around the bar, and how confident and slightly cheeky he is with Hannah - that was great, and I like seeing that side of him. I thought you wrote the characters very in canon, especially Ron: he had one line about Tobias getting "roughed up" that I thought was perfect Ron.

It's also funny how Harry bursts in on Ron when he's sleeping! I like how their bromance is shown, and also how they're a little goofy and... not slacking, exactly, but making bets and such on the job. That fits well with their personalities.

I think you did a really good job with all the investigative techniques! They felt very realistic and useful, especially with checking for magical traces and trying to imagine what might have happened. I really liked seeing this perspective of the crime and how it contrasted with the view seen from Tobias' perspective in the first chapter.

You've definitely intrigued me, and I'm excited for the next chapter and to figure out what on earth might be going on! I really like how you set up all the little details and the big law case - even with something as simple as Hermione not staying over at Ron's because she has to prepare, that says a lot about her and what she's up to at the moment. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! :)

Blackout Round 3 - 9/20

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review!

I really appreciate the feedback on the story. I have been sweating this one a little because it's both my first time writing a mystery and my first time writing the major canon characters outside an AU setting, so I'm glad you felt both were handled well.

I am particularly glad you liked Neville. I wondered in the brief bar scene with Hannah if I had maybe taken him a bit far, but I figured his confidence had really grown by the end of DH and it's six years on from that, so perhaps it would play...

I feel like this story has been much harder to write for me because I am TRYING to keep it intriguing and keep people guessing, so I'm also excited that someone is intrigued! Hopefully I'll be able to keep it that way (and keep the story coming at a decent pace).

It's a good thing you like and notice the small details too. After all, you never know which small detail could actually be huge or which is just a red herring...

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


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