|Review:||nott theodore says:|
Wow, I definitely didn't expect that either! I know that they still haven't left the parlour yet, but I'm impressed with how many twists and turns you've already managed to fit into this story without that happening. I never really know what to expect, but I'm so intrigued by the plan that you have for this story and the plot that I've seen so far!
Draco is so in character that it's amazing. You write him so well, all of his thoughts and even his mannerisms, the way that he approaches a situation and his dialogue too. I'm really impressed with that because he's someone I'd be scared to write more than a lot of other characters. The way that he interacts with Astoria is interesting, too. I liked his remembrance that she was only a girl, but to do his work he had to remind himself that she was just a year younger than him, so not really that young. There's some vulnerability there that could be exploited, I think ;)
I love Astoria in this story. She's so young but she's so determined to protect all of her family and do what she can to escape this, as well as already having done something to sabotage the Death Eaters. She's really admirable, and I felt so sorry for her as the line of questioning led to something that she couldn't have foreseen, and couldn't protect herself from! I'd have thought that her mother might have taught her Occlumency but now Draco knows her secret...
I have seen some sparks of possible attraction between the two of them, I think, especially on Draco's part in finding her attractive. I can only hope that she might be saved through a romance - the story is called Traitorous Hearts, after all!
Blackout Bingo review 7/20
Author's Response: Heeheehee, thank you! The plot twists in this story are so fun to write!
Oh my gosh, Sian, I'm smiling so hard! Thank you! Draco is one of my favorites to read and write, so it means a lot for you to say it's going well. It *is* intimidating to write him. I really wanted to put a spin on his character, but to have it happen in a way that seemed true to the person he was in the book. So hopefully that will ring true as he grows and changes in this story.
Astoria is admirable here, though she really wouldn't believe it of herself. She doesn't consider herself a hero or even a particularly good person. I think that, as far as she's concerned, family is Priority Number 1 (even if it is your slightly-mad father and your bratty older sister). Draco's good at finding a person's weakness. And she had prepared herself for a lot of things, but never really thought that they would suspect anyone but her. She knew how to defend her own actions, but Daphne? Felix? They aren't exactly evil masterminds. She always thought she'd be distracting them from her choices, or maybe her mother's. She never would have thought that her family could be such a potential weakness.
As far as Occlumency goes, you would think that Lavinia would teach her, wouldn't you? This goes back to the crucial difference between the two of them--Lavinia was much prouder than her daughter. Hardly anyone knew what she did. While Astoria lets herself believe, temporarily, that she can't be caught (to give herself the necessary confidence), Lavinia truly believed that. She never taught Astoria Occlumency because (A) She didn't think anyone would find out about her, and (B) Another reason that I cannot yet reveal because SPOILERS!
Muahahaha. What *will* happen next? Will there be romance? Perhaps. Will Astoria get out of this conundrum? Perhaps. What will happen after that? Hard to say.
I do hope you'll come back and find out. The next chapter is in edits and I'm hoping to have it in the queue this week! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! It's so fun to read your theories :)