|Review:||nott theodore says:|
Ah this was another great chapter of this story. Your writing style is so lovely and so suited to the story; it seems to have relaxed in the sections when we discover what happened to Astoria in the past, but when she's in the parlour with Draco and under tense suspicion, the writing seems to shift slightly to adapt to that, as well. It's really intelligent writing and really enjoyable to read.
The scene in the parlour was written really well. I could feel the tension in the air as they talked about it - Draco clearly believes that they have enough evidence to incriminate Astoria, although I'm not sure what they'll do if they do decide she's betrayed them, but Astoria is equally confident of her own safety. She's definitely a brilliant actress, and the link between the two of them with the scars is really interesting.
I can't believe the curse that's been put on her by her own mother! That's so horrible, but I can imagine that there was a reason behind that perhaps we don't know about yet. Maybe her mother wanted to make sure that she wouldn't get caught up in anything to do with the Death Eaters, and punished her in case of it? I'm glad someone was there to save her!
I really like your characterisation of Ginny, as well. She seems in character with the books but we've seen a lot more of her here than we tend to in most stories, and she's really likable. I can imagine that maybe Astoria and Ginny will end up working together more in the future and maybe even forming some sort of friendship. I think they'd be good friends, if they weren't kind of on different sides of the war.
I'm intrigued to see what happens next, so I'm going to read on now!
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Author's Response: Hello again!
I'm happy to hear that the writing style is working with the different tones. I do aim to create different environments, but I try not to stress over all the nitty-gritty style details to much (once I start, I'll never stop). So, I'm glad that it's working! That's actually tremendously good news to me! Thank you.
Draco's overconfidence hasn't totally left him, though it's much-diminished. He does have enough to convince himself that she's guilty, but would it be enough evidence to convict her? Would it matter?
Astoria is confident in her abilities. Really, she's similar to Draco in her overconfidence, however, in her case it's less because she really thinks she's untouchable. To effectively play her part, she has to convince herself (at least temporarily) that she's above it all; that they could never catch her. It's what gives her courage and allows her to stay "in character" as she puts on her act. For Astoria, failure isn't an option, so she has to avoid considering it as a possibility.
The scars are a detail that I love. It's sort of an echo of how the two of them are both similar and different. Both marks involve dark magic, and the choices of their parents, and their own decisions. They've both made choices that they'll never entirely escape--it'll always leave a mark. (Maybe a little heavy-handed with the symbolism? I don't know. I guess I just have a thing for literary figures with literal scars).
Hahaha! You're onto me, aren't you? I guess I've gone back and added crucial information often enough now for you to guess there might be more to Lavinia's curse than meets the eye. I can't say whether her reasons were good or ill, or if it was even really her that performed the curse, but it's good of you to question it!
Thank you so much! And good call--I don't think it's a spoiler to say that there will definitely be more of Ginny :)
Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your thoughts!