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Review:nott theodore says:
Hello!

Oh wow, as soon as I saw the chapter title for this one I knew that it was going to be a great chapter, but I didn't expect that to happen! I loved the way that you built up the chapter so that it seemed quite innocent and calm and then all of a sudden both James and Abigail are really embarrassed!

Michelle seems pretty annoying - not a good friend, and I still feel sorry for Abigail for needing to stick with her, since she's so quiet that she finds it more difficult to make friends. I imagine that at somewhere like Hogwarts, it would be difficult to break away and make new friends in your sixth year. I'm glad they made up for now, but I still hope she finds some better friends.

I didn't mention this in the last review, but I did mean to - I love the fact that she's in Hufflepuff. It fits so well with her personality and it's a nice change to see a protagonist who isn't friends with all the Weasleys.

I liked the way that you showed James's personality had changed a bit and he came across as more cocky and arrogant here, like he's playing a role to make his friends laugh. I think it's true for a lot of people, especially when they're teenagers and trying to fit in. The smell of Amortentia intrigued me though - I'm sure that one or more of those smells is going to be connected in some way to Abigail, and they've already got the shared smell of parchment!

And then Barry and Elijah have to go and do something like that! I'm sure that they thought what they were doing was hilarious, but I don't really like them for it, even though it's kind of typical behaviour for people like them. They just didn't think it through and I'm wondering if, with the line about it not being meant to be Abigail, they thought James fancied someone else, and were confused with how the potion worked or something.

William is really sweet, though! I'm glad that he came along and helped James out and told the other two off - he seems like a really nice guy and it's nice to know that James has at least one good friend.

I felt so sorry for Abigail here, though. It really hurt her to hear James's declarations of love when she knew they were brought on by a love potion, and it was so embarrassing for her. I have an inkling that James does have some feelings for her, which might be why he spoke to Abigail, but I feel so sorry for the two of them. I hope it brings them closer together rather than driving them further apart!

Sian :)

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Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad that you were excited about this chapter! :D It was a lot of fun writing it, although poor Abigail went through a lot. :P

She isn't a good friend at all, she's a little mean and very controlling, hopefully Abigail sees sense soon and manages to get a better friend. But sadly she feels like Michelle is all she has.

I'm glad that you love that she's in Hufflepuff, in my head no other house seemed as good for her as Hufflepuff did. Abigail is too shy to be friends with all of the Weasleys. :P

Thank you, I really enjoy writing James, he acts a lot different around his friends, but then again who doesn't? :P Ahhh they do have a shared smell... I wonder if there's a reason for that which is totally going to come up soon in a future chapter? :P

Yep, Barry and Elijah need to ruin things, oh no they were being really mean. They didn't mean to get Abigail, they meant to get Michelle.

William is a better friend for James than Elijah and Barry, he's good for James.

Awww Abigail needs lots of hugs *hugs her* Ahhh James may have feelings for her :P I feel sorry for them both too, they didn't want everything to come out like it did.

Thank you for the reviews! You're awesome!


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