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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi there!

I really thought you did a great job here! You set up a really wonderful and unique story in just over 500 words (or is 500 and the extra was the an) which was a really impressive feat because we got such a full story of Godric and really got to know him which was really great. The choice of second person POV was a really good one here because I see it so rarely done, especially in the Founders era it provided a fresh light for this story. I think the section where it was most noticeable was the last line because it seemed to reinforce the courage of Godric Gryffindor, but then a vulnerable side too because it almost felt that perhaps Godric was saying that to himself to power him on through the tough times.

I thought the characterisation here was really great! As it was written in second person pov it meant that we were left guessing for longer as to exactly who it was which was a good thing because it meant we could form views on Godric which wouldnít be as biased and it definitely was the case here. We had his rise and then his fall, but he still kept on going which I really admired him for because it was nice to see that this supposed heroic warrior wasnít always mighty and on the winning side.

This was a really great start with a hint of mystery as to why exactly did his friends leave him and what was going to happen next, so Iíll see if I can catch some more of this! Good luck in the challenges! :)

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for your review! I'm sorry it's taken over a month for me to respond.

Yes, I really wanted each chapter to be 500 words each, and the extra is just me rambling on about silly stuff. :) I'm so pleased that you think it's unique!!! I wanted each Founder to have a somewhat different background, and for Godric, I felt that a good theme was succeeding in the face of adversity.

This was my very first attempt at second person PoV, and I think I really like it! It was fun to play around with the perspective and the thoughts that Gryffindor was having. I actually had a specific narrator in mind--which comes in during the last chapter. Let's just say that the narrator of the story knows what's going on inside people's heads. :)

Thank you so, so much! I don't usually try to be mysterious with my descriptions, but this story was one in which I purposefully veiled the character's name until the end. As stereotypical as it is, I wanted to stay true to the concept of Gryffindor bravery, so having him face difficulties and overcome them was a test of his bravery.

Thanks again for your lovely review!

~UnluckyStar57


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