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Review:TidalDragon says:
Hello again!

I was definitely looking forward to the legilimency scene and I thought you set it up nicely. I thought you developed the scene that Ginny experienced with Bree really well, setting up a positive mood to start with and then having it subtly turn darker before everything went haywire.

I am intrigued by how it worked. I had always gotten more the access to memories and information side of legilimency, but I do remember it is also said that the witch or wizard can access thoughts. I suppose that is how they are able to make it a fluid experience that Ginny and Bree can share and explore rather than just reliving the memory she "chose"? Perhaps that is also how the process was able to be poisoned by the appearance of Bellatrix? Also, since Ginny has been focused on Voldemort, what made Bellatrix appear this time (perhaps because Bree is female)?

I also thought the scene in the cemetary with Fred was touching. While it plays on the closer connection from the books that Ginny seemed to have with the twins and on Fred's loss, I thought it also explored just how unhinged Ginny is getting, actually voicing her fear that Voldemort and Bellatrix aren't actually dead. Did the reporters hear that I wonder?

The last scene was also well done. I thought Harry's sense of resignation after the events in Bree's office was so sad. I would have liked to see Harry try to comfort her despite that. I think it seems like something he would have done and could even have magnified his emotions, especially the way you pressed it up against memories of a much happier time.

The basement thing is a creepy cliffhanger! Who made this passage? Is someone using it to "mess" with Ginny, perhaps to actively try and unhinge her? If not, is someone going to?

I feel like great work always leaves these great questions, so overall I really liked the chapter, especially the way you painted everyone's moods and Ginny's experiences. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Hello again! Nice to hear from you :)

I'm glad you enjoyed the Legilimency scene! I wanted it to be kind of an interactive experience and to give Bree and Ginny the potential to work together, even if things didn't work out so well. My thought with Bellatrix is partly based on the fact that Bree is female, but mostly based on the idea that Tom isn't Ginny's only source of trauma. His most loyal follower was also a couple inches from killing her if it weren't for her mother's bravery and quick reflexes.

Yes, Ginny is very scared at this point. She was banking a lot on therapy, since Hermione recommended it and seemed to benefit, and now she feels kind of lost. She wanted Fred to somehow prove to her that Voldemort and Bellatrix are good and dead, but she can't even grasp that peace of mind. As for the reporters, they just seem to show up at her worst moments, unfortunately :(

Harry, I think, is just really tired. He's not superhuman, despite the fact that he was forced to be throughout much of his childhood. I think one message that came out of some of the latter books was to emphasize that--he was just a kid in the wrong place at the wrong time, and he had to shoulder burdens that were too big for him. Remember, though, just because he needs a break now doesn't mean he won't be there for her later.

I'm happy you've still got some curiosity about what is to come, and I really appreciate your commentary on my chapters. Thanks so much for your lovely review!


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