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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi Maggie! :)

Aw, this was just so adorable! You write fluff really well. :) One of the things I really liked about this story was Lily's clear adoration of James. It's constantly there - when she's looking at him, when she's thinking about him - even when he's doing something silly she can't help but think that he's adorable. I especially liked the line where she admits he's a fox! Also, Lily is so clever, noticing that there is something up with the butterbeer and seeing Remus' arm. You did a good job of putting her in canon with how perceptive she is.

James being so awkward and nervous here was so funny as well. I really liked the cameo with the snitch, and how he honestly just seemed so miserable and nervous! The Marauders getting involved in one another's love lives and spying seemed so approapriate, in fact they felt very canon as well, especially with Sirius cat-calling when Lily and James kissed.

The ending to this was so adorable, and I liked how Lily asked him if he really thought she'd say no! :P She knows him so well, and you really got that fun feeling of love across.

This was a wonderful read, well done! :D

Gry/Sly Blackout - 2/7

Author's Response: Hi, Jenna! Ugh, it's been months and I'm so sorry! But I do want to give this lovely review the response it deserves :)

This story was so much fun to write! Kayla was a great partner, and she and I worked really well together to get the ideas flowing. I couldn't have done it without her, and I hope you enjoyed her take on this as well!

I'm glad you thought the fluff worked, because I never write it. Marauder fluff is more Kayla's scene, I think, which is why I wanted to try it :) And I'm sort of a Snily shipper, so it was a challenge for me to write Lily being so smitten with James. But it's canon! It makes sense! Haha, I just had to grit my teeth and do it, and in the end the pairing did feel right. I feel like we don't know a whole lot about Lily in canon, but she did seem very observant and clever, and I tried to get that across. I'm glad those qualities came through for you!

Oh, James. He was surprisingly fun to write. I hope he turned out as precious and awkward as I imagined him. And since the other Marauders didn't really get much face time, I tried to make the most of their mannerisms and little lines of dialogue. It was a challenge to make each of them seem true to canon when I only had a few words to flesh them out.

I'm so glad you stopped by to read this! Writing it was a fun experience, and I absolutely loved working with Kayla. Thanks again, Jenna! You're wonderful :)


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