Allow me to say hun, that your writing has improved so much in such little time. I remember the first piece I read by you, and now I read this piece, and I don't think you could've done a better job with the quote given. You did justice to Khaled Hosseini and wrote his standard of a piece -- this was beautiful.
The way you write second person is admirable. It worked amazingly with this story telling, and was brilliant in every way.
They were siblings -- and eveyrone forgets that. That Sirius had a brother, and no matter what sibling's are your first friends. You captured their relationship so excellently it brought a tear to my eye, because it made it even more heartbreaking because Sirius left, and maybe if he didn't.. maybe if he said one thing, Regulus could've been different. That's one of the hardest things to swallow, that if one thing was different, everything could've changed.
The way you wrote this was like poetry. It was more than just saying things, but you showed them, the pain the fright, everything. Your descriptions were flawless, with zero dialogue and just so much angst, it's hard not to love this piece.
I'm really thrilled that this was entered for the challenge, because I think you've done an excellent job. Thank you for being so amazing, I truly love it.
Good luck, Satya!
Author's Response: Aw, Nadia! Do you know how long it took me before I could come up with a satisfying response? Almost a month, that's how long.
You know I was trying to find any excuse to write a story about Reg and Sirius and the minute I saw a Khaled Hosseini Quote challenge, my first thought was OMG THIS. I SHALL FINALLY BRING THE PLOT BUNNY TO LIFE!
Or at least, something along those lines. That's why I submitted this about two months ahead of the deadline, which is practically unheard of from a person who usually submits any assignment one week late :P
Ah! Where do I start? I'm so glad that you think my writing style has improved. It just makes me so thrilled to hear that. I have butterflies inside me :3 And to do justice to Khaled Hosseini?! Hun, you're just too much ;) Thanks a million.
I got inspired from your lovely Theo story to write in second POV. It took me many months as you can see to sum up the courage. It still isn't the same quality of writing as yours but eh, nothing of mine is...yet :P I'm just kidding, your stuff is just too good for me.
EXACTLY! No matter whether Reg and Sirius were in enemy houses, they were first and foremost blood brothers. To not feel a modicum of affection for someone as close as that is lying to yourself. You're completely right, life is based on the what ifs and the possibilities that it's completely heart shattering to think of what a brilliant guy Regulus could have been had he had someone to guide him properly.
POETRY! Oh, you're too kind. I'm very flattered (if you hadn't already picked up on that yet :P) but I'm sure a lot of it has to do for the wonderful academica who agreed to beta it for me! She's so awesome. *is gushing now*
I'm thrilled that you like it! Thanks for being so amazing and coming up with this equally amazing challenge! I'm off to stalk the other entries!