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Review:TidalDragon says:
Hello again!

I'm glad to see that Harry got placed with the Weasleys as opposed to some other arrangement. I think that result seems more natural than other potential options, despite the focus of the story.
I also like that you had Dumbledore challenge Snape's behavior toward Harry, which I have always found unjustifiable, as well as making the catalyst (I think) behind Snape's possible changed attitude going forward the fact that he may start to see Harry as "Lily's son" as opposed to a copy of James (not that I think James was a bad person, quite the contrary, just that I think this makes it more believable from Snape's perspective).

I found the dynamic between Snape and Mrs. Weasley interesting. They seem to be polite to one another and even cordial, which seemed a bit odd to me given Snape's past as a practitioner of the Dark Arts and a reformed Death Eater.

Aside from that I just noticed that occasionally there is some non-standard speech slipped into dialogue by adult characters, examples being "Soo" at the beginning of the chapter and "pretty much" somewhere else by Snape. Just be careful of those when you're writing because they seem like either typos or OOC for an adult character under the circumstances.

Hope you keep going with this as the story idea has good potential!

Author's Response: Thanks for the read & review!!

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