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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
...Wow. It's been over a month since you requested this review from me, and now I'm finally going to give it to you. I am SO incredibly sorry for being so late in reviewing this chapter. For some reason, life has been rather hectic lately!

Ooh, a cliffhanger!! Things are REALLY getting interesting now!! Ginny Weasley has been missing for five years and suddenly she (or someone who looks like her) shows up... Just as the investigation is being relaunched! What a conundrum! What events led to her reappearing? What has she been doing for five years? How is this going to change the investigation? No matter what, this will play out in a very interesting and enigmatic manner, I'm sure!!

Notes about characterization: I love that you've made Teddy Lupin kind of a tortured soul-ish. An orphan boy, living with his godparents, the only parental figures that he's known and loved, and then the woman who was like a mother to him disappears!! He's got to have some serious psychological damage, and the fact that he winces at the sunlight is very telling!! He's been in the dark for far too long, but he's about to get some answers and become enlightened!!

And I like that you've given Cress a little more characterization in the midst of all of this drama. Mommy problems? She's got those! So this Ginny investigation becomes even more vital to her character because it's like she's trying to prevent James and Teddy going through the same sort of heartache. Great characterization all around!!

There were just a few grammatical mistakes that I noticed:

"was used to work in lighted places."~Here, I think you may have meant "working" instead of just "work."

"Even his smile has the slightest touch sadness."~Since the rest of the story is in past tense, I think that the "has" should be "had," and there should maybe be an "of" in between "touch" and "sadness."

"I mean, was she doing job or something?"~The phrasing of "doing job" is slightly awkward. It could be improved by saying "doing a job" or possibly "working a job" or even "did she have a job?".

"Gabriel"~I believe that Fleur's sister is named "Gabrielle." That's just a minor thing, but just to prevent any confusion...

Great third chapter!! Feel free to re-request if you're not totally angry at me for being late in reviewing this chapter! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: It's totally fine! :) I know you sometimes cannot balance everything like you want to and anyways your review totally made up for it! :')

Yeah, she's back! But I can't really promise you will get the answers of these questions so soon. ;) You will have to wait a little! The investigation will be a bit more complicated and interesting at the same time. They want to make sure the one who has returned is Ginny and not anyone with a huge stock of Polyjuice Potion. Cress handles things up with a little more skill from now on. :)

I'm glad you liked that! I haven't really read about him yet so I characterized him my own way. He's always like that to me. I'm so happy you caught the light part! That was EXACTLY what i wanted to say- he's now getting used to being in dark and needs to be enlightened. Let me give you a little hint- look at the fact that Cress opened the curtains for him and let the light in! THAT is also a bit significant I guess. ;)

Aah you're reading my mind!! That's exactly why the case is important for Cress so I added some of her problems here. And yes she has a deeper connection with the case than you think now.

I'll correct the mistakes ASAP. Thanks for pointing them out! I would have never known.

Thanks for the wonderful review! Oh I will surely re-request! How can I be angry at you after this review? :D

Ashwini


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