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Review:Unwritten Curse says:
Hi there! I noticed that this was your first fanfiction so I thought I'd stop by with a review to help you out! :)

First, I want to tell you that I like the mystery you established here. I was going to ask why George got kicked out, but then you establish it as a sore subject ("you have to promise not to tell anyone why we got kicked out of the house") so I understand why it doesn't come up in narration. I imagine it will be revealed at some later date, so I'm curious to discover what it was and if it really was "little."

I think something you can work on is detail. Small details (such as what George was packing, or perhaps a detail about his red eyes from crying) would be helpful in grounding the scene and making it seem real. I really like those details because they help me connect to a character. Just a thought!

Thanks for sharing your piece! Good luck!

-- Gina

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review I really appreciate it. I'm so glad you liked the mystery in the 1st chapter and hope you like to rest of the story too. I'm glad you meantioned details, and I will work on the details. Thanks again so much.

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