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Review:adluvshp says:
Blackout battle!

This was a nice and sweet oneshot. I liked your take on James and Lily's relationship, rather different than how canon showed it, and yet I enjoyed it. I also liked how you showed the relationship James shared with the other 3 marauders from his point of view. It made sense and was believable.

The way you wrote Sirius and James finding out about Remus was also a good scene and again quite believable. The ending was somewhat sad but very fitting. It just reinforced how good things in life shouldn't be taken for granted.

All in all, I liked reading this and found it an interesting piece. There were a few grammar errors but nothing so bad that it can't be fixed with a re-read. Besides that, I'd say good job.

Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thanks. It's been fun revisiting my old stories as my writing career is blossoming :)

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