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Review:adluvshp says:
Blackout Battle!

First off, I have to say, that for something that was written over the course of months, this actually flows pretty smoothly. I liked your writing style of how this was a reflective piece and enjoyed reading your portrayal of Draco. It was interesting how you got into his head and took a different take on the incident at the Astronomy tower. Most people say he couldn't do it because he was "good" but he believes that he couldn't do it because his courage/ambition deserted him, and that was a very unique albeit twisted way of seeing things. I always enjoy stories that offer a fresh perspective on something done before, and so I really loved this.

It was impressive how Draco was canon-like throughout the narrative. His thoughts on how the poisoned mead reached Potter and Weasley and "unfortunately" didn't kill Ron was amusing and in-character. I also liked how he was drilled into the whole ambition thing since he was a child and how he craved for the glory, as that's the kind of personality he has. You showed him in a very believable manner and I liked it.

The ending was also interesting and somewhat amusing of him waiting for the Malfoy to 'fulfil his task' and get the glory. This showed a darker side of Draco, something a lot of fics don't show these days, along with the theme of overpowering ambition, and made for a great read.

The only CC I'd give you is to perhaps polish the grammar a little. Some sentences are odd sounding in places. Also, the too large spacing is a little discomforting while reading, so if that's fixed it'd be good. Apart from that, good job =)

Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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