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Review:adluvshp says:
Blackout Battle!

Hello fellow snake xD

So, I am amazed that you managed to write this so fast! This is so beautifully written and so hauntingly portrayed that I'd have thought it would take many hours to master such a piece.

I absolutely loved the description and imagery you used. I could visualise every little thing - the cottage, Morfin himself, the snakes coming to him, and the end of him wrapped in a sheet thrown in the sea - it was all vivid and amazing.

I also liked how you described the events in Morfin's life so simply in separate segments. The writing style was fitting for such a story. The theme itself was creepy in a way and it gave me a haunting feel. I also enjoyed your characterisation of Morfin. It made me pity him and at the same time not like him so much. Your depiction of him is exactly how I'd imagine him though, and aligns with what little we've seen of him in canon.

It was interesting how Morfin continually thought of his pure noble blood, of him being the heir of Slytherin, and of greatness. It matched well with the theme of the battle and did not come across as forced either.

Over all, this was a dark, twisted view of Slytherin and its greatness from a Slytherin almost gone insane himself, and I had a great time reading it. The plot idea itself was brilliant.

Great job!
10/10
Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello snake friend! ♥

I'm so glad you liked this! It's been really lovely getting positive feedback on it since I wrote it so quickly, but I did have the idea brewing for a little while.

Yay, I'm excited you liked the description, and that it felt vivid! And the simple segments, that's a great way of describing the structure. His thoughts, when I imagined them, were very fragmented and linear, and so I tried to write the story that way as well. I'm quite pleased to hear you pitied him in a way, as that's how I felt about him by the end of the story.

Yes! I felt that being a Slytherin was all Morfin had to be proud of, and so he would obsess over it. He really had a quite unfortunate life.

I'm so glad you liked this, and how it represented Slytherin! :) Of course, most of us snakes are a little less mad, but I had so much fun working on it for the battle.

Thanks so much! :D


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