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Review:keyty says:
Hi! Here with your requested review.

So far, I like your plot. Even though the chapter is short, you didn't fill it with too much information. It flows nicely and is upbeat without being too fast paced, and that's difficult to do, so kudos to you! (hey, that rhymed!)
I'm interested to see her mother's story, but that probably won't be revealed for a while. I can't wait to see how their date goes tomorrow, I bet it's going to be very funny! I'm also excited to see how you portray Luna's kids, that could be very interesting.

I only caught one error, at the very beginning:
I really dont know, she told her him
Easy fix!

I think this story can be very cute and, if you let it be, emotional as well. Please come back to re-request, I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: thank you! I'm glad you liked it :) yeah, I originally I had the first chapter much longer and having a lot more information but I thought i'd be a little to overwhelming and decided to split it up. Yes! You will find out a lot more information in the upcoming chapters!

Oh thank you for that! I'm always really bad at catching my own mistakes :p I'll make sure to fix that when I go back and edit it :)

thank you! I definitely will :)


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