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Review:anythingcouldhappen says:
Hi! I'm reviewing this for Blackout Bingo :)

Right off the bat, the summary for this story got me really interested. Such an interesting concept to write about! Of course Snape is so complex that any story he's in (as long as he's well written) gets more interesting.

And I think you did a good job of writing Snape so kudos to you! He's just the right amount of nasty Snape we know, while still clearly getting upset about Harry's situation with the Dursleys.

Your writing flows very well, and is quite easy to read. There were just two parts I think you could improve :)

"So Harry had been locked away in his room, a cat flap, in order to pass meager food rations through" The sentence here is kind of confusing. At first it sounds like Harry's room is a cat flap.So maybe either split the sentence into two, or re-word to make it a bit clearer.

"heavy rod iron bars" Here I don't think you need "rod". It does't add anything to the description of the iron bars.

Overall, great job! This is so interesting. It's always fun to see one of the many what if's :) Hope this helped!

Sam

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