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Review:anythingcouldhappen says:
Hi! I'm for the review swap :)

This was beautiful! I think you really managed to capture Dean's emotions in a very realistic way. Dean's always seemed like a very down to earth person, and your writing definitely reflected that. You also did a great job of writing Luna. She can be so hard to write with her wackiness, but you did great!

The theme of touch (especially at the end) was just so perfect. I think we tend to underestimate just how much human contact means, and how much we would miss it if we lost it. Your descriptions at the end about touch were lovely!

I also loved the bit where Dean started crying, because he started thinking. I know from my own experience that often tears come later, after the shock and numbness wears off. You described that really well!

Oh and I love your writing. It's very...crisp? I'm not sure if that's the right word. But its very easy to read, while still providing so much description and capturing the mood of the moment.

Awesome job!

Sam

Author's Response: Hi Sam! Thanks so much for swapping with me! I've been really wanting feedback on this story, and I'm so glad you took the time to help me out :)

I'm so happy that you liked it! Dean is one of my favorite characters to portray. And since I love him with Luna, I've had to learn how to portray Luna as well. She's so difficult to get right, just like you said, and I'm so glad she seemed authentic.

I was really interested in exploring Dean's journey back to human contact after being cut off from it for so long. I totally agree with you that we take touch for granted sometimes, so I tried to imagine what it might feel like after months without it. I think it would be an incredibly significant, almost overwhelming experience, and I tried to really show that at the end.

Haha, I'll take crisp! I love hearing that my style is easy to read. That makes me really happy!

Thanks again for swapping with me! I really enjoyed reading your chapter, and I so appreciate you taking a look at mine! I'm so excited that you liked it :)

--Maggie


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