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Review:HEG says:
Yes, this is good.
I like the way that you've still left her being a detective and the details about that a bit of a mystery which makes you want to read more!

I'm still not so sure about Lily 's personality the bit at the start suggests that she's a tomboy about her not liking hot pink.

You've repeated the bit where she says I make a mighty fine detective twice but I suppose that can be effective suggesting that she's done something REALLY amazing. I wonder why Harry Potter never took the job. After all, he did defeat Voldemort! I guess that will be revealed throughout.

Ooh, Scorpious was involved. That's interesting. I wonder how he came into the story. You totally got it right saying that Uncle Ron wouldn't like them having them anything to do with Scorpious. He made that clear from the start. However couldn't she confine into Harry? He wasn't so much against Scorpious as Ron was. I think that Harry believes in second chances and new starts. Ron, as you said, would DEFINETLY blame Scorpious even if he had done nothing wrong.

The last sentence made me want to read more and I look forward to reading the next chapter and hearing about the mystery that they solved.

A very good chapter,

HEG :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review :)

I think the following chapters make things a bit clearer. Lily is exaggerating a bit when she says its the worst mystery ever, and the reason she doesn't go to her dad has to do with not wanting just to depend on his heroism and name and stuff.

Hope that cleared things up! Thanks again!

Sam


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