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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hi there,

I am so so so so sorry about how late this review is! I don't have any excuse except RL getting in the way. Apologies!

So, I really enjoyed this. I did read the first chapter to get a bit of background into the characters and story and I'm really intrigued in where you're going to take this story!

I'll address your AoC first. Plot believability? I honestly think you have no issues here. I absolutely love the idea of Jordan & Parsons and I loved the origins you have it to from the war. I would be very surprised if something like this didn't exist and so I loved it and think it's a brilliant idea! Now I just look forward to seeing what you do with it.

Thierry's plan. Well, it is a little crazy isn't it, but it's the kind of crazy I can imagine someone in his position doing. Money is no object and with him being in the public eye he's going to do everything he can to keep something like this coming into to light. It's crazy but I'm looking forward to seeing it being executed!

So Nick. You said he was popular with your readers and I actually can understand why. I don't know, there's something about him. Clearly there's something gone off and I am dying to know what he did (hoping you'll reveal all soon?) which isn't good that makes me a little weary of him, but the way he is with Molly in this chapter is quite sweet! He hints that he took the fall for Alicia too... I'm wondering if that's the bad thing or if he did something bad then made it worse with what he did for Alicia. Too many questions basically! But yeah, I'm really intrigued into his character, I think he's interesting for sure. I want to learn more about him.

And finally, Alicia. I don't think the selfishness is too subtle, don't panic! Its strange though, I hate what she did to Albus because that's horrible and she also seems to be good at getting things out if people, whether that be information or help. Like Nick says, everyone has a price and she seems to be good at finding that price. Despite that though, I still find her interesting. I want to know more. You've done a really good job of creating these really complex characters with faults and flaws but making them so fascinating that people can't help but be drawn to them! You've done a great job basically.

So yeah, all in all I'm really really enjoying this story and I can't wait to read more. Your characterisation is brilliant, you've done a great job of making your characters different personalities and the story is definitely gripping!

I look forward to reading more! Once again, apologies for the late review! Please feel free to re-request, your story is great!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi Lauren!

Don't worry about it at all -- this response hasn't exactly been quick, either! RL is quite annoying; I completely understand!

Thank you so much! I'm really pleased that you're enjoying Jordan & Parsons so far and that the agency is something you find realistic!

Thierry's plan is what I was concerned about most. I was trying to keep a balance between him having more money than sense, and coming up with something utterly convoluted, and I was worried that I had lost that balance. I needed it though, to get the plot moving :P I'm really happy that you can imagine it actually unfolding! :D

Hehe, Nick does have a bad boy side to him. (You'll find out more as the novel unfolds!) I think Molly has made him reform, because she isn't the type of person to date a criminal so he has to keep his activities on the down-low, and reduce the criminality. (Is that even a word?) With regard to what he did for Alicia -- he was a petty criminal, so taking the fall for her actually resulted in a worse sentence for him than it would've for her. And yet, Alicia values her reputation highly, so she maintains that the agency would've been ruined if she'd confessed.

Alicia is quite devious. I'm actually quite surprised that people like her, since she's a Slytherin and they aren't quite as popular :P I'm really glad that you love to hate her though, it's fabulous to hear such wonderful things about her characterization.

Thank you so much, you're absolutely fabulous and I will definitely be re-requesting! ♥

-Isobel


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