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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for the Valentine's Day competition! :) So, let's go over things:

Grammar/Spelling: I only noticed a few misspellings in the story. On the first line, "trying to catch my eye as it he would" where "it" should be "if." Also, "than it was good target" where "than" should be "then." Final thing: I saw that you've spelled Rodolphus wrong throughout the story, using a "u" instead of an "o" at the beginning of his name. ;)

Plot/Characterization/Descriptions: I love how this story fit with its companion piece! Great job. You really showed prison life well and captured Bellatrix's character. Since most of the story occurred in Bella's head, I think it's more apt to talk about the characterization. I really think you did a great job with it! She's such a creepy character and you showed that so well. I also loved the little details you added about how things looked, including characters and setting, and about the things Bellatrix does to amuse herself. Like killing rats. Ew. Overall, you definitely created a world that I could see and understand. Well done.

Emotions/Interactions: Normally I don't clump so many categories together, but I think it works for the review of this story. ;) So, anyhow, I think you did a good job showing Bellatrix's adoration for Voldemort paired with her dual ambivalence and passion for her husband. Since all the interactions were thought about retroactively, I've paired them with her emotions. You definitely showed what she was feeling in relation to how she thought about her relationships with Voldemort and Rodolphus. Good job!

Style: I like how you managed to show the creepiness of Bellatrix's character even through the style of writing you used and the added moments in italics. Impressive!

Overall, I think you did a great job. I hope you enjoyed it and thanks for participating in the competition! Good luck!

--Emily

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Thanks so much for pointing those out, I've gone through and fixed them. :) The Rodolphus mispelling was so odd, I changed it to that spelling because I'd double-checked it somewhere, clearly not at a reliable source. :P I blame Roddy for having such a tricky name!

I'm glad you liked how the stories fit together! I had a lot of fun writing her and imagining how things might unfold in her head. It was a rather psychological piece since she was trapped, and I'm glad you liked seeing how she passed the time. Hehe, I love the ew reaction - that's just what I was hoping for. :)

Emotions and interactions together makes perfect sense with this one! I'm glad you liked the emotions and how she sees Voldemort and Roddy. It's wonderful to know the emotions came across well.

I had a lot of fun toying with the style a little! I'm glad you liked it! :)

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, I had a lovely time with the challenge and really appreciated the staff organizing and orchestrating it. Thanks! :)


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