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Review:800 words of heaven says:

I am so sad to see this story abandoned, but I shall review all the chapters posted because what you have is brilliant and I can pretend that it's the ending of a film noir when I reach the last chapter :P

I just love Albus' narration so much. His voice is funny but I don't think he realises just how amusing he is. I like how he narrates it almost as if he's in a film noir or a gangster movie with one of those voice-overs. I love it!

Poor Scorpius! No one gives him a chance, do they? To be honest, there isn't much to him just yet. Albus does seem more interesting as a character than Scorpius at the moment, especially with that middle-child syndrome he has going on, but I'd love to see Scorpius come into his own - or at least, his relationship with Albus grow.

And who is this mysterious girl? Other than being their mark of course. I'm sure there's more than meets the eye with her if she's got Albus describing her as a femme fatale and eyes the colour of cornflowers :P No good detective story worth its salt is complete without a femme fatale. I have high hopes for her - in the two remaining chapters.

And that cliffhanger! Always a cliffhanger. This one's worse than the one in the last chapter, though. Bomb explosions are scary, especially when used as cliffhangers!

I'll be back soon, I hope :)

Author's Response: I was sad to abandon this story! It was fun to write, but I really don't have the time or energy to devote to it - it's another sad example of a story begun impulsively, without thinking far enough ahead. It's very kind of you to keep reading and reviewing - if you do want to know what would have happened next, I can give you a summary over PM on the forums. :D

That's exactly the kind of tone I wanted to convey with Albus's narration - he wants to be that cool detective from film noirs, and I can totally imagine him watching those films on his days off. XD

A lot of this story was going to centre on Albus and Scorpius's relationship, and on how Albus learns how to trust Scorpius - he slowly sees what Scorpius has to offer, and gives Scorpius that chance that everyone else has denied him. They do make a great team once they've gotten used to each others' methods.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! It means a lot to hear that you've enjoyed it so far!

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