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Review:Infinityx says:
Christy! I just realized that I hadn't continued reading after the first chapter so here I am!

This is so sad! I can't believe Ginny and Harry have to be so far away from each other. Although it can't be too bad, since they can apparate. Oh, how I wish that I'm a witch. My boyfriend and I get to meet twice a year if we're lucky and apparition would certainly make things so much easier. I hope Harry and Ginny's relationship lasts though. They're so cute together. :)

I found the pace a little bit rushed. Things seemed to keep happening one after the other and I got just a teeny bit disoriented, but overall it was truly wonderful. A bit more description would have been nice though.

I don't understand why Harry came back drenched. Was he trying the broom out? That was a little unclear.

there was no alternative. I totally understand how this feels. :( I love how close they are and how much they feel like they belong with each other. You've done a great job of characterizing them. I'm so glad that Ginny's determined to take her life in her own hands, and Hermione's being such a good friend to her. :)

I found a few commas missing. I think they were in the previous chapter.

Harry's just the cutest. :) Buying Ginny that Firebolt was a way for him to express what he felt without telling her and I think that was so sweet!

I can't wait to see how this plot proceeds. There are so many ways it can go from here and I have a feeling that it might get quite angsty. :D

It's time for you to catch the writing bug and update soon! I think this story has great potential and I'm eager to see where it goes. :)

~Erin

Author's Response: Erin! That's totally fine :) I'm glad you liked the first chapter enough to want to come back and read more!

Writing Harry and Ginny's relationship is so beautiful and horrible for me! I want them to just be together and happy etc. but I know it can't be that simple at all. I'm so sad to hear about your boyfriend :( If I had the power to make you a witch, I totally would... and then I would change myself and wonder why I hadn't done that years ago :)

Thank you so much about the pace tip. I can totally see how it could seem rushed and I definitely want to change that. So thanks for pointing it out, I will be sure to pay very close attention to that as I keep writing.

Hmmm I can see how Harry being wet could be a bit confusing. He wasn't riding, he was just wet because he had been out in the rain, buying the broom. I should have made that more clear... /:

Thanks so so so much for your kind words and helpful tips :D I can't thank you enough for reading my story, let alone taking the time to leave such a thoughtful review! I truly hope I get the writing bug soon so I can speed through the rest of Chapter 4!

Christy


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