OH MY GOODNESS THIS STORY WAS SO PERFECT! TANYA WHY ARE YOU SUCH A GOOD WRITER?!?!?!
It was definitely worth all of the hours and effort and coffee reheating you had to go through to write it! I am in love with this chapter and your descriptions and how it all worked together. It was absolutely lovely. I think that you did a really great job continuing on from the previous half. It flowed nicely. Fantastic partner work on that one!! For some reason I had it in my head that it was going to be in Lily's POV, but I loved it the way you wrote it, I think it wouldn't have been as good if it had been written any other way. The voice you wrote this in was so great, too. I felt bad for James, and I just wanted to laugh and bury my face in my hands every time something went wrong.
I loved loved loved the line that said "Lily. Of course, Lily. Lily would always win."
That was fantastic, and so true. I can just see it, everytime James tries to get a word in or argue or prove his point, he just gives up. Obviously Lily will win. I loved the way you portrayed them, the way that the reader got subtle hints that Lily was enjoying the date as terrible as it was, but that James couldn't see it. And that kiss at the end was so adorable, because it was so Lily and James was just shocked. And then the ending. So cute. Lily being his. Ugh. I'm mush, you made me mush. Adorable. I want someone to think that about me! I wish I was Lily in this story!!!
I still can't believe that you had a hard time writing this. It's so wonderful, if I didn't know how long it took you, I'd think that you just sat down one day and decided to write a lovely story about this adorable couple. Really. Ugh, this makes me want to go read every single Jily story like ever written, except they won't be as good as this, so then I'll be disappointed. Maybe I'll just read all of your stories.
I think I really liked your half, just in case you couldn't tell!! ;) Fantastic job! Good luck! And congrats on finishing it!!!
Author's Response: SARAH! THIS IS SO NICE! I CAN'T EVEN DEAL WITH IT! :-D
Oh boy, that is just... honestly, so good to hear. I'm really proud of myself for getting it done on time, but I'm absolutely thrilled about having not let my incredible partner down by missing the deadline! And on top of all of that, knowing that you still enjoyed it... well that's just ace. ^.^ So yes, worth all the panicked crazy for sure. :-p
Yay for collaboration partners! Jen was fantastic to work with and I'm so happy you could feel how connected our stories were with one another! And that's so funny that you were expecting this in Lily's POV! Maybe because a lot of partners did the switching POV thing? Either way, I'm so happy that even though you were expecting Lily, you were still able to enjoy James' voice just as much! *squee* And gah! There are so many phenomenal compliments in this paragraph that I'm just going to throw them all together with one giant THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! And also yes: poor, poor James. hehehehe
I'm so happy you pointed out that line! It's one that I wasn't sure would land or not, as it was one of the last to be added and therefore written at the height of my sleep-deprived state! hahaha What a relief, though! Thank you! :-D
*squee* I'm so happy you've said that about the subtle hints that Lily was enjoying herself! While James isn't truly able to understand them for what they are, it's amazing to hear that you as a reader still picked up on it! And yay kissing! I've just realized that this is only the second kissing scene I've ever written, so I'm happy you liked it! And pfft, you'll be somebody's Lily someday, don't you worry. ;) Oh, and I love that you've turned to mush. Eep! ^.^
It is such a huge relief to hear that I was able to hide the struggles I had - that's really wonderful of you to say, thank you! Gosh, you're just far too kind, really. I don't even know what to say! You're just so, so lovely and I endlessly appreciate it. This review makes me so, ridiculously happy. *hugs*
I'm about speechless at the moment; clueless as to how to wrap this response up gracefully, because sheesh... you've got me so elated that I can't even think straight! So just... thank you, again. And again and again and again! And thanks for the luck and the congratulations! You're really too sweet. *hugs*